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Eleonoire LeLeon

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Eleonoire LeLeon

Post by LieLeLe on 25/3/2018, 05:51

Name: Eleonoire LeLeon

Age: 19

Group: Military Police

Rank: Soldier (Perhaps some kind of a Representative Division in the Military Police?)

Appearance:
Height: 154 cm
Weight: 50 kg


Identity: Ellie's the type of a person that will mindlessly nod as someone tells her their deepest secrets. Her mind is always somewhere in the distance, mostly because of the rampant imagination that is driven by the only thing she truly loves. Using the 3DMG to fly and have fun is all that matters to her. Although she prefers to be nice, when provoked a more toxic nature takes a hold of her. The quickest strategy to get a painful dose of vile insuts hitting in the weak spots is to lie either to her or in her presence. Harsh truth is her favourite kind, her smug look and smile rarely washing off her face when she is either told or tells it. Eleonoire is a loner and a showoff, completely in love with the limelight. Even though she's in the army, she's the rebellious kind and boils inside when someone orders her around, especially when they are not competent enough. After the wall Maria fell, she sunk into loneliness more, only breaking out of it in training. And just as it began to get better with her psyche, Trost happened. When she was straightening up, the news hit her right in the gut, regressing all the progress. The fact that the younger of her brothers was at the time striking up a deal for her father in the attacked city did not help. His whereabouts were unknown, but after several months, the last bit of her hope faded. Right now she tries to live like before the attacks, but it seems to be out of her reach. Yet she's still bearing the same cheeky smile and smug look, her overall behaviour became gloomier. Though when her mind gets distracted for long enough,  the playful nature springs back from the earlier, carefree days, it never lasts for an extended period of time.

Preferences:

-Likes: Acrobatics with the 3DMG, it's what she does all day. She's both the first to appear on the training grounds and the last one to leave them. And cooking, she loves that too. Survey Corps as well, she silently admires their bravery.

-Dislikes: Listening to others, she deems it as a complete waste of time. She's not fond of arts in any shape or form, always taking scientific literature over poetry.

-Fears: She's terrified of both the Titans and the Walls finally falling. After Trost fell, she became a bit of a doomsday prepper. Except for that, she feels uneasy in vast plains. She considers to be relatively safe in cities or forests while wearing her 3DMG.

-Goal(s): Previously, Ellie was only driven by the desire of acquiring the 3DMG and having fun, but after humanity was reminded of what dwells behind the walls, it's not so clear anymore. Maybe to overcome her fears, or to just survive after it all collapses?

Backstory:
   Being born in the upper-middle class family in the city of Mitras, Eleonoire had a tranquil childhood. Her parents only lacked time for her, but two older brothers filled her early years with joy and playfulness. They were the ones that introduced her to her passion by taking her to a parade at the age of 5. After her gaze lied upon the acrobatics the device makes possible for the first time, she accidentaly started to curate her entire life to get hold of the device and reach it's absolute limits. Though she didn't realize it at first, all her interests vanished almost instantly, being replaced by the 3DMG and it's capabilities. She made her brothers 'train' her by holding upside down, swinging around and throwing into the air. Her passion made her parents install a special swing in the backyard, even though it worried them greatly.

   After pleading and promising to get into Military Police and not even consider joining the Survey Corps, they allowed her to go into the training camp. That, and also learn from the books her family was sending her throughout her entire experience, to not let her mind 'take a break', as part of it was convinced it was just a whims of a bit spoiled girl. Soon enough she graduated at the top spot of her class, keeping her word and becoming a part of the militia. It didn't take long for the word about her abilites to spread and soon enough, she was performing at the same parades she was watching as a child. Ellie's perfect world crumbled with wall Maria, fear and pessimism swallowed her whole and made her push everyone away. She was lost and couldn't sleep at night, dreading to hear the ground-shaking steps of a Titan. The state of her mind was fixing itself at least, but as Ellie's comfortable life was about to go back on track, at the worst time possible, Trost fell. What made matters worse was the fact  the younger of her brothers was there and even after several months, was never to be found. The threat was real and this time, she even had proof right in her face, laughing at her. Her mind was a mess and even after having quite a while to cope, she was yet to form her point of view, trying to just get all those thoughts out of her mind, never fully going through with them.

   She hates travelling and always insists on wearing her gear during it if 'something were to happen'. Those are the times when her attempt to ignore it all fall apart as she meets face first with the idea of fighting Titans. The only time she even saw them was at the wall surrounding Trost, soon after getting there to help. The reason she volunteered was her brother and upon seeing the carnage and gathering no information about his demise, Eleonoire was just doing what she was told with a blank stare, like a mindless drone. Though she got a military pass to grieve over her brother's death with her family upon coming back, she rarely visits now, unable to keep her mind off the looming threat and her fears when over there. The Division makes it easier with both the privelages and distractions it provides, from parades in the capital and other cities to sessions with cadets at the training grounds, meetings with higher-ups and even a rare banquet with royalities where her Division represents the military as a whole.


Stats:

Strength: 3  
Agility:  15
Intellect: 6

Extra: Nothing, maybe except for the existance of some kind of a Representative Division.

Footnote: Please consider this point distribution, have in mind her uprising never had her tend for her own, she was never scared of lack of food or a roof over her head, which is quite the advantage over people that barely scrapped by and walked around hungry for days. It let her mind stay on the target of becoming the best and it should make her excel during both the camp and after it. And the first distribution was a bit curated by a different profile I opened to have easier time working on mine.


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Re: Eleonoire LeLeon

Post by Herdir on 25/3/2018, 14:06

First of all, great idea for a character, an actual stereotype MP character, met with the harsh reality of the titans.

That being said, there's three problems that need fixing before I can approve of this app:

1. You're ~40 words short on identity. That's essentially a sentence or two, try to find a new angle of your character that you didn't think of and write that.

2. You're ~100 words short on the backstory. Keep in mind that the RP takes place after the fall of Trost, which is a good few years from the fall of Maria. There's quite a number of years where Eleonoire had to face the titan idea, so she's likely formed a much more defined view than raw fear: either by coping with it, and staying stoic in some way, by making it a fuel, by rage and anger, or by dropping into actual terror of the idea. Try to explore that!
3. I'm sorry, but I can't possibly allow the 28 stat point total. It's too over the top, given the general power level of most characters on this forum. Given characters that had much more than mere military training only have about 2 points extra, I don't think you should go over the directed point limit.

That's about everything, though. Rules problems, not character idea problems, really.
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Re: Eleonoire LeLeon

Post by cornix on 25/3/2018, 16:28

Welcome to the forum!
So far I really like your character! It seems like an interesting addition to your current ones, we really don't have any typical MP and right now your character seems like the only sensible character. (I mean, being scared of titans is probably the only proper reaction)

There is really only one problem left with your character application... Herdir was a bit dumb and said there was only 100 words missing in the initial post, but it was actually 200...so you are still like 90 words short.
You might want to write about what she is doing now, after the fall of trost in the military police. Is she still doing parades? Does she work in recruiting new people by showing them her skills? Does she ever get out of Mitras? If yes, how does she see the general reaction? Is she trying to ignore everything that is happening and just goes on as good as she can?

What I really like is your idea for a representative division. Obviously I am not too sure if what I think it is is the same what you think it is. I would suggest that you go on our discord server and talk it with us there, or you just make a post in the plot forum (you could even do it before you make your character) explaining what this division would do.

I am really sorry for Herdir being an idiot and I am looking forward to see my character meeting yours!
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Re: Eleonoire LeLeon

Post by LieLeLe on 25/3/2018, 16:45

Yeah, I figured the Representative Division is not a spot on name, but I couldn't find a good translation for what I was trying to convey (and it's literally how it's called in my country so Google Translate wasn't really helpful). I'm thinking about an equivalent of soldiers participating in gun-swinging shows, but instead of that, it's 3DMG manuvering. It would be something additional and most of them would be hand-picked, with their day to day duty being mostly normal, with some exceptions of special treatment towards them to make the burden lighter than the one of other soldiers. And I'll fill in the wordcount, thanks for the ideas to write about. I'm starting the edits immidiately!
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Re: Eleonoire LeLeon

Post by Herdir on 26/3/2018, 12:42

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